Okay, since EVERYBODY ignored my last post titled “My fan fiction on quizilla” or something like that, I felt compelled to try again, but this time using the actual title. Hoping to get your attention. I don’t think anybody on quizilla has read it, or if they have, I don’t get feedback or anything. And I don’t know how to get people to read it, so I figured I’d try on the p!atd message boards since the story is about p!atd.

It’s a vampire story involving p!atd and Sonny Moore, and two girls. Please just give it a chance, its not a silly, un-original vampire story. Me and my friend wrote it together last year and I’m re-writing and editing it because I just like to write. I’ll post the links as soon as I get messages letting me know whether you’d like to read it or not. I don’t mean to whine, but I’ve just worked so hard on it, and I’m so proud of it so far. I don’t want it to go un-read.

Oh, do post it soon!
I would love to read it! =D

Shut up, Charlotte -.-

you know, if you were to actually post it on here (like the actual words instead of a link or whatever), then people would probably read it and comment. Just a pointer, buddy =]

I was just about to do that actually.

I'll post all five chapters ^^

okay cool! can't wait to read it! =]

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Katie’s dad had gone to bed hours ago, it was almost 1’o clock in the morning. But Katie and her friend, Malea were still wide awake, practically bouncing off the walls you might say. Because of course, when did you ever hear of a sleepover that involves sleeping? Not until daylight at least.

They had about three different things going on at once. That “Scary” movie that had started to be watched, The Grudge. Katie thought it was the most hilarious movie ever produced though. There was music playing quietly in the corner, and Malea had just started playing Charlie the Unicorn on her laptop. She started laughing again and pulled Katie next to her to watch it too.

Sitting next to Malea seemed so incredible to Katie since she’d never even met her until today. They both lived on opposite sides of the world basically and had only met through msn randomly, where they got to know each other and learned neither of them weren’t some sixty-seven year old creepers from Hong-Kong or something.

Malea was Swiss, and only a few months older than Katie, who was visiting her real dad in England, since she’d been taken to Canada with her mum who wanted to live with her new husband, but had to always visit her real dad. And it so happened that Malea was visiting England too, so of course they met up immediately and here they were now.

Katie got up when the video had finished.
“I’m getting a glass of water.” She said.
“Okay, I’m coming too!” Malea replied in her Swiss accent that Katie thought was absolutely adorable. She spoke perfect English too.

Both giggling, the two girls tried to walk down the stairs quietly (and carefully, as they were narrow stairs).

As Katie drank her water, she looked out of the window. There was fog outside and frost on the old stone walls, sparkling in the moonlight. Katie thought it looked so beautiful.

Malea shuffled her way beside Katie to see what she was looking at.

“Oh! Its so pretty.” Malea said quietly. She seemed to of calmed down a bit.

Katie noticed a graveyard a little way down the street, Malea saw it too.

“You know, there’s an enormous old mansion behind that graveyard.” Katie told Malea when she saw her also staring at the graveyard.

“Really? I can’t see it.” Malea replied straining her neck to see.

“That’s because it’s a little bit further behind the graveyard, its in the middle of the Yorkshire Dales.” Katie explained smiling.

“Can we go tomorrow?” Malea asked.

“Why tomorrow? Why don’t we just go now?” Katie replied. She loved walking at night, especially when it involved graveyards and old houses. “Vampires are supposed to inhabit the mansion, and I’m curious.” She added.

“Vampires?” Malea raised her eyebrow.

“Do you believe in them?” Katie asked.

Malea shook her head, truly unsure.

Katie smiled, “Do you want to go? We won’t stay long. We’ll just have a quick look, then leave.” Katie tried to talk her friend into it. “It will be a magical adventure.” She added, quoting Charlie the Unicorn.

Malea laughed slightly, thinking about it.

“hmmm. Okay, as long as we don’t stay very long and don’t get us lost.” Malea warned Katie.

An enormous smile lit up Katie’s face. “I won’t!” She assured her friend.

CHAPTER II

Katie and Malea quietly ran up the stairs to change into their normal day clothes, and to put on their sweaters and coat, since it was obviously cold outside with all that frost.

“Are you ready?” Malea asked Katie as they were about to open the front door.

Katie nodded and opened the door, quietly closing it behind them as they stepped outside.

“Its so cold.” Malea said, she could see her breath in the air.

“Yeah, but it all looks so pretty. Wait till’ we see the graveyard, I bet that will be beautiful.” Katie replied. Katie found nothing scary about walking around in a graveyard at night, it wasn’t even unusual to find Katie just hanging around a graveyard, she loved them.

Malea kept close to Katie as they walked quickly down the street. Eventually a low stone wall, that was practically falling to pieces came into view. Green moss grew in the cracks of the stones, and the frost shimmered like glitter on the grass behind the wall. An old medieval church stood grandly on one side, its impressive architecture still in almost-perfect condition. Clearly the graveyard. It was built on a hill overlooking the Dales and Malea could almost tell why Katie spent so much time here.

The ancient head stones were crumbling, moss and plants grew up them. They were long forgotten, nobody bothered to visit or lay flowers down for soul buried beneath anymore. Katie thought it was the saddest thing in the world, to see a grave without flowers.

Leafless trees surrounded the beautiful yard, their naked branches swayed violently in the cold wind.

Malea pulled her coat closer around her body as the wind blew past her and Katie.

They came to the exit of the graveyard, which required walking down a steep hill. Malea and Katie could see a large house in the distance from this view though. Katie was startled when she saw a dim light in one of the windows.

“Malea, look.” Katie said pointing to the window. “How is that possible? The house has been abandoned for years.” Katie added.

Malea looked towards where Katie was pointing, and there was indeed, a dim light in the window. Like a candle flame.

“Maybe we should go back” Malea said nervously. She was just as curious as Katie though.

“No!” Katie replied quickly. “We’ve come this far. Come on, you’ll be alright.” Katie insisted and tugged on Malea’s coat to make her walk down the hill.

It was even colder now, being in a more open space. The two girls walked faster until they were just a few feet away from the mansion. Both of them stopped at that point, looking up at it nervously. They couldn’t really go back now and waste their time.

Before they even stepped any further, they heard a voice behind them.
“What are you girls doing here?” It was a young teenage boy’s voice, fairly deep. He didn’t sound angry, more curious.

Malea and Katie turned around startled. They couldn’t see the boy very well, just his outline which was tall and thin. His profile wasn‘t very clear in the moonlight especially as they stood under the shadow of the enormous building.

“Well…. why are you here?” Malea replied bravely, even though she was scared to death.

“I live here.” He said very matter-of-factly, coming closer to them.

Malea and Katie both automatically took a step back. They were both too scared to ask questions now.

The boy walked closer to them, until they could see his face. It was angelic almost, to their surprise. He had large brown eyes, a small nose and a round face. They couldn’t see the colour of his hair, but could just see that he had a dark fringe that swept over his forehead, and was long and messy at the back.

“My names Ryan.” The boy said. Malea nor Katie said anything, they just trembled under his gaze.

Ryan frowned.

“I’m not going to hurt you.” He said smirking. “You both look frozen to death, come in.”

He smiled at them sweetly, it was hard to refuse. Even though both Malea and Katie knew better than to enter a strangers house. Before they could even reply, he had his arm behind their backs, not touching. But to guide them to the door.

CHAPTER III


Malea glanced at Katie nervously. Katie was just as scared as Malea.

Ryan opened the door and gently pushed them inside. It was strangely very warm.

There was a large stone staircase about twenty feet away from the door. The girls didn’t have much time to look around as Ryan grabbed both of them by the arms and pulled them into what seemed to be a parlor.

They both struggled and cried out.

There was about four others in the parlor, all looking at the terrified girls.

“God! Finally, Ryan!” Another boy said. He had shorter hair, but also big brown eyes and a longer face than Ryan.

“I want this one.” Ryan said letting go of Katie and focused on Malea.

“No!” Malea screamed, getting the wrong idea immediately. She started to struggle and kick more.

Katie was about to try and help her friend, when she felt cold, strong arms around her waist. As she struggled, she tossed her head to the side and saw the most incredible boy she’d ever seen. He looked as scared and upset as herself. He had long black hair that hung partially in his face, sad hazel eyes, a rather large, round nose which suited him perfectly, and was dressed head to toe in black. He was shorter than Ryan and the other guys too.

“Please stop.” The boy said quietly to Ryan and the other boy whose name was Brendon. He looked like he was about to cry.

Brendon glared at the short boy and ignored him. Then grabbed Katie’s hair, making her scream more, and pushed her onto a fancy Victorian style sofa.

Ryan had Malea backed up against a wall, with his arm firmly slid behind her back. He brushed her hair back with ice cold fingers so that her neck was visible. His lips drew back to reveal two dagger-sharp fangs and moved his head towards her bare neck. Her blood was pulsing quickly through her veins, she still tried to push and kick him away but it was no use. He was so strong, and he couldn’t feel her efforts anyway. He was so starving and bit into the vein of her neck in a flash. Malea screamed so loud as pain surged through her body, she struggled more as he drained her. The room was spinning to her, she couldn’t breathe or think, only about the pain at least. She heard Katie’s scream from across the room then blacked out.

Katie still struggled under Brendon’s weight. But all she could think about now was Malea, how she’d stopped screaming. Praying that he hadn’t killed her. She had no idea what was going on. She looked back at Brendon and saw his sharp white fangs. But was too stunned at this point to scream or fight back.

He sank his sharp teeth into the neck of her skin, practically tearing it apart. She let out a loud, high-pitched cry. Tears streamed down her cheeks, Brendon pulled back and all she saw was blood around his mouth and all over his teeth. He then grabbed her wrist and bit into her vein, causing her to scream loudly again. The sofa was stained with blood now, she’d never seen so much in her life. Her heart kept beating though, Katie thought she should have been dead already.

“STOP!” The short boy screamed, clearly he’d had enough of watching this. Ryan grabbed the boy’s mane of hair and angrily threw him next to Malea. He realized that she was still alive and used this opportunity to try and save her while Brendon and the others tormented Katie.

Malea was slowly opening her eyes, and looked terrified when she saw another vampire next to her.
“Shh..I..I’m not going to hurt you.” He whispered desperately. Malea didn’t believe him but there wasn’t much she could do. She was in too much pain to move.

“My name is Sonny.” He whispered.

The boy named Sonny took something out of his pocket, a piece of sharp metal. Malea gasped, thinking he was going to hurt her. But instead he slit his own wrist with the piece of metal, dark red fluid ran down his wrist. He watched it for a moment then moved his wrist to Malea’s mouth.

“Drink” He pleaded. Malea just looked at him.

Growing impatient, he placed his bloody wrist directly on her mouth and forced her. Malea tasted the blood that dripped into her mouth and something immediately sparked in her, she grabbed his wrist and drank enthusiastically.

Sonny pulled away before she drained him and examined his wounded wrist.

Malea felt like her body was burning as the immortal blood ran through her veins. She felt like her heart was thumping inside her head, but it wasn’t beating at the right rhythm. Painfully, her body changed.

Sonny hesitated but got up and ran towards the sofa where Katie lay screaming and crying in a pool of blood. Her own blood. She looked at him helplessly, her small chest was heaving up and down at a scarily fast pace. He didn’t know what to do, she was surrounded by the others.

Brendon suddenly got up, pulling Katie onto her feet with him which couldn’t seem to support her anymore and she collapsed onto her knees. Her white top was stained with blood and continued to run down her neck. She had always thought the concept of vampirism was incredible, but as she sat too weak to hold herself up, with her own blood running down her neck and chest. Thinking her only friend just a few feet away from her was dead, and believing it was all her own fault. All the beauty, power and mystery of being a vampire just didn’t seem worth it anymore to her. She felt misled, once again. And once again, blamed herself.

Sonny darted towards her at an impossible speed, prying Brendon’s hands off her arms. He didn’t stop him this time, assuming she’d be dead within a minute. Katie fell forward into Sonny’s strong arms while Brendon, Ryan and their other vampire spectators left the room, glancing at Malea who lay quite lifeless on the floor.

They slammed the door behind them loudly. Sonny picked Katie up and lay her next to Malea, at which Katie began to panic when she saw Malea. Thinking she was dead, and broke into hysterics.

Sonny quickly tried to calm her down.

“No, no, listen. She not dead.” Sonny said quickly holding her shaking body.

“But you will be if you don’t keep still a minute, calm down. Its alright.” He said as she broke down in nervous tears. He held her for a minute, but knew he didn’t have long if he wanted to save her from death.

Sonny tore the skin apart again from his previous wound he’d saved Malea with. The blood rushed out quickly like a stream, and he pressed it to her mouth. As soon as Katie tasted the blood on her tongue, she drank without question. Sonny felt her growing stronger, their hearts beat together at a rapid speed. Katie could hear it and she wanted more. She sucked harder on the wound, now sitting up straight.

Sonny winced and tried to pull his wrist away at this point. She was strong enough to drain him, he pulled away quickly feeling slightly dizzy. He looked over at Malea who was now waking up again.

Like Malea, Katie felt Sonny’s blood burn through her veins. Her heart pumped it around her body, destroying everything human within her. The hot blood burned through every vein in her body, she felt like she was on fire. Her heart was thumping loudly in her head, she twisted her body in pain. Crying out. Until she couldn’t hear her heart beat anymore, the thumping and the burning stopped altogether and her body went cold. She sat up, looking perfectly healthy except for the pallor in her face. Her eyes were darker, but were the same big blue eyes she’d always had. And her hair had somehow changed itself to her natural, long dark curls that she usually straightened every morning. She looked like a flawless doll, except for her new two sharp fangs.

oooh interesting!

Thankyou ^^
Should I post the rest yet?

i'd say wait a bit, see if you can grab a few more readers.

Okay, Will do ^^